NovelNymph
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The Argument
A poem inspired by my day.
The Argument
Malicious,
the words seeped out,
creeped out of her raspberry lips.
Lies,
the words formed,
de-formed on her spit covered tips.
Bitter,
every pore in her body expels,
repels, urges me to leave.
Friendship,
can anything be saved?
it's hard to conceive.
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3/31/2006, 3:47 pm
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celtic goddess
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Re: The Argument
Was the transition from 3rd person to 1st intentional?
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4/1/2006, 3:12 pm
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NovelNymph
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Re: The Argument
It's all in the first person Liz  The first woman mentioned is another person - the person who the poem is about.
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4/2/2006, 8:07 pm
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Djjaines
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Re: The Argument
very cool I like it
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Daniel: Master of malapropisms and Danisms.
Danism: Using stupid sounding or vague descriptions to put what may be an intellectual point across.
Beatrice: You really put the "W" in anchorman don't you?
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9/13/2006, 11:27 am
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